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Another Tequila Sunrise by *Bahama-dreams:iconBahama-dreams:



Beautiful colors sloshed around the mason jar,
smoke swirls around my head, hot boxing the car.

Tequila was my mothers monthly drink of choice,
after taking another bong hit I found my voice.

Gary man, should we split or go to class.
Aw fuck 'em he'd say, they can kiss my ass.

So it went, our daily routine.
We'd split and go driving, rarely be seen.

The party people do the minimum to get by.
They'd rather get drunk, stoned, stay high.

Mother accompanied me to the office of the head dude.
My expulsion was rapid, unforgiving and rude.

I yelled "FUCK ALL OF YOU, I DON'T NEED THIS SHIT".
Being that I was so cool, so hip, so it

No graduation, no prom type memories for me.
Just a lesson hard earned, hard learned you see.
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Author's Comments

This is for the July voice prompt from *simplypoetry's page.

Write from the point of view of someone who's just graduated or is soon to graduate.

I didn't do it, I ended up with a GED once I got my shit together. The GED has never hurt me but, the not having my shit together at that time surely did.

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:iconkneelingglory:
The voice comes through loud and clear (and sounds alarmingly close to my 15 year old sister's brash tone....) :+fav:

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:icon3wyl:
I really like the alliteration and the rhyme. You've definitely portrayed the message effectively. :nod:

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:iconbahama-dreams:
I was 16 when that happened so yeah...

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:iconbahama-dreams:
Thanks, it doesn't follow the prompt to the letter but like the pirate code, it's more of a guideline....

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:icontashagladwell:
True, this doesn't follow the prompt entirely, but personally I feel that if you were inspired by even just the general idea of the prompt, then that's enough :) I really like this, you've created a really original view around a topic which I think most people would find difficult to write about, without being cliché. The rhyme is extremely well timed, and the rhythm naturally follows suit. Very well written :)

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:iconbahama-dreams:
Thank You so much for your response! :)

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:icontashagladwell:
You're very welcome :)

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:)

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:iconnjkay:
The voice is indeed very clear in this. Great poem!

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